The Dreaded Query- Guest Post by Lauren Spieller

I have a very special treat for everyone today! Lauren Spieller is guest-posting today on the dreaded query! Lauren is an agent intern and has quite the eye for making a query shine. This past week, she began a query critiquing business and has already been flooded with requests (ie: pleas for help!).
She’s also offering a 10% discount if you contact her for a query critique and mention this blog post AND she’s graciously offered to give one lucky commenter a free query-critique. So, make sure you when you comment to post a way for her to get in touch. One week from today, will choose a winner.
Without further ado, help me to welcome Lauren to the blog! (also, if you have other questions, post them in the comment section and either Lauren or I will try to respond!)

Queries are hard. It’s a fact of life, of nature. Queries are really, really hard.

But why? They’re just short summaries of a novel, right? You wrote the book, so summarizing it should be a piece of cake! Right? Wrong.

Queries force you to creep inside your novel, to learn how its internal mechanisms function, to grasp at its still-beating heart. To write a truly spectacular query letter, you need to know your book from the inside out—what makes the characters tick? What conflict drives the plot? And what, for the sake of all that is holy, is at STAKE?

Juliana has been kind enough to put together a bunch of excellent questions about queries and querying. I hope you find my answers helpful! I’ll be checking in for the next week to see if you’ve added any of your own questions, so don’t be shy!

How do I open a query? What should the first line be? – ImJustCasey

Dear NAME,

You’d be surprised how many people don’t address their queries to a specific agent (or spell the agents name wrong!)

Once you’ve done that, you have a couple of options. Some people choose to jump straight into their novel summary, while others feel more comfortable giving a short introduction to their manuscript first. Both options are perfectly fine, but if you’d like to open with something, you have a few options.

If the manuscript was requested (either during a contest, on a blog, or at a conference), feel free to reference this fact. Something as simple as “Thank you so much for requesting my query via #PitMad (or at the Writer’s Digest West Conference, etc.) Below you’ll find….” And then whatever it is that you’re including (query, pages, synopsis, etc.)

If you’re querying without having been requested (which is totally fine…no shame in being discovered in the slush!), then you can start with something as simple as “I am seeking representation for TITLE, my WORD COUNT + GENRE. Below I have included…” and then whatever it is they ask for in their submission guidelines (found on the agency website).

What are the vital elements of a query: ie, format, biography, stakes?

A good query will include THREE ELEMENTS:

  1. a brief summary (2 paragraphs or so) of your book
  2. info about the title/word count/genre.
  3. a short bio containing information that is RELEVANT to your novel.  Are you writing a non-fiction book about water skiing? You better mention that you have an Olympic medal in aquatic sports. Or whatever. Shut Up.

That’s it. But! I also recommend including a tailored message to the agent (ie I’m querying you because you said you were interested in Dragon tales, and by jove, I’ve written one!). 

Is it true that your query should be personalized for each agent?

Yes. 😉

How do you write a query when your book has multiple POVs? – similar to @RebeccaEnzor’s question

This is so tricky, isn’t it? I’m going to admit to you guys that I have yet to do this. In fact, my current ms SIGHTLESS is told from the pov of a 16yo, but the novel is interspersed with chapters from her mother’s pov. And yet, I chose not to write a multi pov query. I decided that since the 16yo dominated the majority of the novel, it was unnecessary to include her mother’s pov in the query.

However, if you’re writing a novel that is split evenly between two characters (or even 70%, 30%), you may not be able to do that. Juliana and I were discussing this very issue, and she showed me a great query that was written from a single pov, but managed to make it clear that there were many POVs in the novel.  You can check it out here.

If that doesn’t appeal to you, then you can include both points of view. Again, you have options. Some people like to write their query from the pov of an actual character. If this is your style, then you’re going to have to dedicate one paragraph to each character, and make sure that  a) both characters have distinctive voices, and b) your paragraphs aren’t repetitive. Honestly, this is so difficult to do well, that I think you might want to skip it unless you think it’s ABSOLUTELY necessary for your novel.

The other option is to address what’s happening to both characters from an omniscient pov, focusing on the MAIN CONFLICT to organize events. It’s tricky, and I highly encourage you to make sure your final product makes sense by showing it to critique partners (or to me!)

Ultimately, it’s a balancing act, and you have to decide which option works best for your novel and your voice.

What’s the ideal word count range for a query? And the max number of sentences allowed in a query (does it matter?) – @ifeomadennis

I’ve heard it said that the ideal word count is 250 words, but I think this is, once again, dependent on you and your query. Less is always more in terms of word count, but don’t freak out if you’re at 300 words or even 225. Just make sure you’ve said everything you need to say, and not a word more.

How should a writer detail expertise in a certain period, especially if a history buff who researched a lot, not a professor? – @ConniDowell

If you mean, how do you make it clear in your summary, then my answer is: just write the novel summary, and let the research shine through. If you’re writing historical fiction and you’re including a specific location and historical events/people, I think it’ll be self-explanatory that you’ve done your research.

However, if your question actually pertains to your bio paragraph, then you can include your interest in a given area of study. Don’t go on and on, though. Just mention that you’ve spent quite a lot of time researching Ancient Egypt, and that your research played a large part in the creation of your novel, in particular the characterization of the Pharaoh. Or whatever.

I’d love to hear about historical fiction queries. Should one detail whether certain places and events are real or imagined? – @ConniDowell

If a place is real, I think the agent will recognize it. Same goes for invented places—if the reader doesn’t recognize it, they’ll assume its imaginary. Obviously this isn’t a perfect solution, so if you’re still not sure it’s clear, you can always say the setting was “inspired by REAL CITY HERE” when you get to the penultimate paragraph of your query (you know, the one where you give the title, word count, and genre).

What’s a good way to go about researching agents and finding the agent that’s right for your book?

Ah, I love this question! Researching is one of my favorite parts of this process, after the writing itself. Here’s what I’ve found:

  1. Websites like and are GREAT resources for finding agents.
  2. I  found a bunch of agents via Twitter (you follow one agent, you get a suggestion to follow two more…etc).
  3. You can also buy books, but that’s really not necessary. Or cheap.
  4. You should also find out who represents books that are similar to your own. I’m working on a YA fantasy project, so I found out who reps J.K. Rowling (Harry Potter), Jennifer Bosworth (Struck), Leigh Bardugo (Shadow and Bone), Veronica Roth (Divergent), and on and on.
  5. Another way to get an agent is by entering contests on blogs. I found most of these through twitter. Even if all the agents ignore you, you’ll meet people who can be VERY helpful critique partners. I’ve made some great friends this way, and I rely on them a lot when it comes to feedback.
  6. Yet another way to get an agent is through twitter hashtags. Keep an eye on #pitchmaddness or #pitmad. Basically, you write your book pitch in 140 characters or less (this part sucks, take it from me) and if an agent likes it, they’ll ask you to send them a query. It’s still the query model, but you already have an “in” that way.

I found over 200 agents this way, all of whom represent YA Fantasy (which is what I’ve written most recently).

Pro Tip: If you plan on writing in more than one genre or for more than one age group, then make sure the agents you’re querying are open to this. No point is querying an agent who ONLY represents non-fiction if someday you plan on writing a novel for Middle Grade readers.

How important is it that [the agent] be located physically near you? Same coast? Same continent? Thanks! – @Swan Mountain

Not important at all. If it was, we’d all have to move to NYC (not that I’d mind…)

Last: give a quick and dirty tip for making a query shine!


Write it, then put it away in a deep dark corner of your computer and leave it there for AT LEAST a few days—a week if you can stomach it. You’ll be amazed how much more clearly you can see the query after some time apart from it.


Lastly, as Juliana mentioned, I’ve started my own query critique business at Stop on by and see me sometime. I’m happy to help with all of your query-woes 😉 

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22 thoughts about "The Dreaded Query- Guest Post by Lauren Spieller"

  • This was really helpful! You know, I hadn’t even thought about the querying quandaries that could result from a multiple POV book. Thank you, Lauren, for all your advice. And thanks, Juliana, for arranging this.

    P.S.: I would definitely be interested in a query critique, should I be lucky enough to win the drawing. My email is the best way to reach me. cgbdowell (at) gmail (dot) com I’m crossing my fingers!

  • Kaye says:

    Awesome round-up of some really good query tips. I’m definitely bookmarking this and will reference this to other writers wrangling with their queries. Thanks, Juliana and Lauren!


  • Kris says:

    Great post, especially on how to query with Multiple POVs… have been wondering how to query my WIP and appreciate your tips on the matter (i.e. lots of ways to approach it!)
    Thanks! @KKMHOO

  • Leah Rhyne says:

    Seriously, people, Lauren’s advice above is priceless. She and I have traded queries back and forth, and she has quite the eye. Congrats to Juliana and Lauren on a great interview!! 🙂

  • Very thorough! And great advice.


  • Andrea Kline says:

    Super helpful info!! Especially as I’m in the stage of revising my query!

  • Jamie Ayres says:

    Great info! There’s nothing I hate more than trying to write a query!

  • Paula says:

    Thank you for sharing the info on how to make a query shine!

    Feel free to find me on Twitter: @PaulaLHarvey : )

  • Talynn Lynn says:

    Query trenches are hard enough when you are wondering how well your query is really written.Make sure your query is tip-top shape, all polished and pretty before sending it out into the agent inboxes.Lauren knows her query do’s and don’ts. If chosen, you (or me!) will receive an awesome gift!
    Thanks for the opportunity!

  • Thanks for answering my question 🙂

  • Lisa Arnseth says:

    Great post! I printed this out yesterday and I’m working on revising my query today… it’s definitely the trickiest thing I’ve had to do with this manuscript. I feel like the query has been revised almost as much as the book itself at this point, but I’m determined to nail it. Boo yah! (Well, there goes my shot at winning a free query. I’m pretty certain “boo yah!” disqualifies me from all publishing privileges, everywhere, forever. Sigh. See, this is why I need help!) @LisaArnseth

  • Kiersi says:

    Yes! I want to be in this contest like OMGWTFBBQ! Especially since I have a multiple-POV book that’s 50/50, and I’ve been struggling a lot with how to structure that. You have my email, Lauren, hope that contact info works?

    Thanks for the post!

  • Kathy says:

    All great tips. I’ve always wondered what happens to those queries that never get a response? If I win the free query critique I’m @sloankath on twitter. thanks!

    • Juliana says:

      Usually, the queries that don’t get a response are passes and they’ll be deleted. Often times you can find the agencies response policy- no response means no, etc.

  • Jackson Baer says:

    Thank you for the great advice and I’d love to win a critique!

  • Thank you for addressing the question about multiple POVs! Working in a sentence that the book is sometimes in the sister’s POV will be easy, while the query and first pages (and title) make it clear that the book is mainly the MC’s. Thanks, Lauren!

    And Thanks Juliana! for having her to your blog 🙂

  • Carrie-Anne says:

    I’ve heard some conflicting advice about queries from different sources, but at heart, it’s usually the basic dos and don’ts. I’ve heard some people recommending against personalizing the query unless you personally know the agent, since s/he already knows who s/he represents or what s/he’s looking for, but if you don’t personalize, it could look like you didn’t do your homework. I’ve also heard about a 4-page query that actually got an agent, though I’d never try that myself.


  • Krystal George says:

    Wow, this was an amazing post and very enlightening 🙂 Thank you!@witcheslottery

  • Lori De La Cruz says:

    This was incredibly helpful! I will definitely be getting in touch with you Lauren. 🙂

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  • This was very helpful. I am definitely going to read back through this before I start constructing my next query in a few months. I will also be checking out your website/business. Thanks for the post!

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