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The Dreaded Query- Guest Post by Lauren Spieller

I have a very special treat for everyone today! Lauren Spieller is guest-posting today on the dreaded query! Lauren is an agent intern and has quite the eye for making a query shine. This past week, she began a query critiquing business and has already been flooded with requests (ie: pleas for help!).
She’s also offering a 10% discount if you contact her for a query critique and mention this blog post AND she’s graciously offered to give one lucky commenter a free query-critique. So, make sure you when you comment to post a way for her to get in touch. One week from today, will choose a winner.
Without further ado, help me to welcome Lauren to the blog! (also, if you have other questions, post them in the comment section and either Lauren or I will try to respond!)

Queries are hard. It’s a fact of life, of nature. Queries are really, really hard.

But why? They’re just short summaries of a novel, right? You wrote the book, so summarizing it should be a piece of cake! Right? Wrong.

Queries force you to creep inside your novel, to learn how its internal mechanisms function, to grasp at its still-beating heart. To write a truly spectacular query letter, you need to know your book from the inside out—what makes the characters tick? What conflict drives the plot? And what, for the sake of all that is holy, is at STAKE?

Juliana has been kind enough to put together a bunch of excellent questions about queries and querying. I hope you find my answers helpful! I’ll be checking in for the next week to see if you’ve added any of your own questions, so don’t be shy!

How do I open a query? What should the first line be? – ImJustCasey

Dear NAME,

You’d be surprised how many people don’t address their queries to a specific agent (or spell the agents name wrong!)

Once you’ve done that, you have a couple of options. Some people choose to jump straight into their novel summary, while others feel more comfortable giving a short introduction to their manuscript first. Both options are perfectly fine, but if you’d like to open with something, you have a few options.

If the manuscript was requested (either during a contest, on a blog, or at a conference), feel free to reference this fact. Something as simple as “Thank you so much for requesting my query via #PitMad (or at the Writer’s Digest West Conference, etc.) Below you’ll find….” And then whatever it is that you’re including (query, pages, synopsis, etc.)

If you’re querying without having been requested (which is totally fine…no shame in being discovered in the slush!), then you can start with something as simple as “I am seeking representation for TITLE, my WORD COUNT + GENRE. Below I have included…” and then whatever it is they ask for in their submission guidelines (found on the agency website).

What are the vital elements of a query: ie, format, biography, stakes?

A good query will include THREE ELEMENTS:

  1. a brief summary (2 paragraphs or so) of your book
  2. info about the title/word count/genre.
  3. a short bio containing information that is RELEVANT to your novel.  Are you writing a non-fiction book about water skiing? You better mention that you have an Olympic medal in aquatic sports. Or whatever. Shut Up.

That’s it. But! I also recommend including a tailored message to the agent (ie I’m querying you because you said you were interested in Dragon tales, and by jove, I’ve written one!). 

Is it true that your query should be personalized for each agent?

Yes. 😉

How do you write a query when your book has multiple POVs? – similar to @RebeccaEnzor’s question

This is so tricky, isn’t it? I’m going to admit to you guys that I have yet to do this. In fact, my current ms SIGHTLESS is told from the pov of a 16yo, but the novel is interspersed with chapters from her mother’s pov. And yet, I chose not to write a multi pov query. I decided that since the 16yo dominated the majority of the novel, it was unnecessary to include her mother’s pov in the query.

However, if you’re writing a novel that is split evenly between two characters (or even 70%, 30%), you may not be able to do that. Juliana and I were discussing this very issue, and she showed me a great query that was written from a single pov, but managed to make it clear that there were many POVs in the novel.  You can check it out here.

If that doesn’t appeal to you, then you can include both points of view. Again, you have options. Some people like to write their query from the pov of an actual character. If this is your style, then you’re going to have to dedicate one paragraph to each character, and make sure that  a) both characters have distinctive voices, and b) your paragraphs aren’t repetitive. Honestly, this is so difficult to do well, that I think you might want to skip it unless you think it’s ABSOLUTELY necessary for your novel.

The other option is to address what’s happening to both characters from an omniscient pov, focusing on the MAIN CONFLICT to organize events. It’s tricky, and I highly encourage you to make sure your final product makes sense by showing it to critique partners (or to me!)

Ultimately, it’s a balancing act, and you have to decide which option works best for your novel and your voice.

What’s the ideal word count range for a query? And the max number of sentences allowed in a query (does it matter?) – @ifeomadennis

I’ve heard it said that the ideal word count is 250 words, but I think this is, once again, dependent on you and your query. Less is always more in terms of word count, but don’t freak out if you’re at 300 words or even 225. Just make sure you’ve said everything you need to say, and not a word more.

How should a writer detail expertise in a certain period, especially if a history buff who researched a lot, not a professor? – @ConniDowell

If you mean, how do you make it clear in your summary, then my answer is: just write the novel summary, and let the research shine through. If you’re writing historical fiction and you’re including a specific location and historical events/people, I think it’ll be self-explanatory that you’ve done your research.

However, if your question actually pertains to your bio paragraph, then you can include your interest in a given area of study. Don’t go on and on, though. Just mention that you’ve spent quite a lot of time researching Ancient Egypt, and that your research played a large part in the creation of your novel, in particular the characterization of the Pharaoh. Or whatever.

I’d love to hear about historical fiction queries. Should one detail whether certain places and events are real or imagined? – @ConniDowell

If a place is real, I think the agent will recognize it. Same goes for invented places—if the reader doesn’t recognize it, they’ll assume its imaginary. Obviously this isn’t a perfect solution, so if you’re still not sure it’s clear, you can always say the setting was “inspired by REAL CITY HERE” when you get to the penultimate paragraph of your query (you know, the one where you give the title, word count, and genre).

What’s a good way to go about researching agents and finding the agent that’s right for your book?

Ah, I love this question! Researching is one of my favorite parts of this process, after the writing itself. Here’s what I’ve found:

  1. Websites like and are GREAT resources for finding agents.
  2. I  found a bunch of agents via Twitter (you follow one agent, you get a suggestion to follow two more…etc).
  3. You can also buy books, but that’s really not necessary. Or cheap.
  4. You should also find out who represents books that are similar to your own. I’m working on a YA fantasy project, so I found out who reps J.K. Rowling (Harry Potter), Jennifer Bosworth (Struck), Leigh Bardugo (Shadow and Bone), Veronica Roth (Divergent), and on and on.
  5. Another way to get an agent is by entering contests on blogs. I found most of these through twitter. Even if all the agents ignore you, you’ll meet people who can be VERY helpful critique partners. I’ve made some great friends this way, and I rely on them a lot when it comes to feedback.
  6. Yet another way to get an agent is through twitter hashtags. Keep an eye on #pitchmaddness or #pitmad. Basically, you write your book pitch in 140 characters or less (this part sucks, take it from me) and if an agent likes it, they’ll ask you to send them a query. It’s still the query model, but you already have an “in” that way.

I found over 200 agents this way, all of whom represent YA Fantasy (which is what I’ve written most recently).

Pro Tip: If you plan on writing in more than one genre or for more than one age group, then make sure the agents you’re querying are open to this. No point is querying an agent who ONLY represents non-fiction if someday you plan on writing a novel for Middle Grade readers.

How important is it that [the agent] be located physically near you? Same coast? Same continent? Thanks! – @Swan Mountain

Not important at all. If it was, we’d all have to move to NYC (not that I’d mind…)

Last: give a quick and dirty tip for making a query shine!


Write it, then put it away in a deep dark corner of your computer and leave it there for AT LEAST a few days—a week if you can stomach it. You’ll be amazed how much more clearly you can see the query after some time apart from it.


Lastly, as Juliana mentioned, I’ve started my own query critique business at Stop on by and see me sometime. I’m happy to help with all of your query-woes 😉 

A Day in the Life

My most amazing beta Sophia featured me on her blog this past Thursday. She has an incredibly creative series where we get to spend a day in the life of other writer’s. It’s pretty sweet. Go check it out!

Interview with Jessica Therrien

Please put your hands together for the fabulous Jessica Therrien, author of Oppression! I have a wonderful interview for you guys, today, and I hope you go check out her book after reading it 🙂

1. Please describe your book! 

I’m cheating…this is the blurb from the press release 😉

OPPRESSION, tells the story of a young woman who discovers that she belongs to a secret society of individuals with extraordinarily long life spans and unusual abilities. Fearful of prophecies about their only daughter, her parents kept her hidden from the world – and the society – for as long as they could. But when their own untimely deaths leave her to fend for herself, the truth of her origins and the fateful prophecy find her at last.

2. Do you remember the moment when you were first struck with the idea for Oppression?

The idea for Oppression didn’t really “strike” me. I didn’t have a dream or see something that made a light bulb go off. Oppression was the result of me searching for the next Twilight. I couldn’t find a book that sucked me in like Twilight did, so I decided I would come up with my own story, something that had all of the elements I was looking for in a YA paranormal romance.

That’s great. If you can’t find it on the shelves, why not just write it yourself? 🙂

3. What was your favorite scene to write in Oppression?

After getting my first set of editorial comments on my original manuscript I had to do some re-writes. I added a completely new villain named Ryder and a lot more action. Those re-writes were the last scenes I wrote in the book, and they are all my favorites.

Action scenes are always fun to write and they’re even more fun to read!

4. What is the most difficult part of the writing process, for you?

I do this thing when I write (I’ve only just realized this in writing book two of the series). I write out-of-order, and I write whatever scene I’m excited about in the moment. Then, eventually I have segments of each chapter, even though most of the chapters aren’t finished. After a while I hit a point where I feel like no more ideas are coming. That’s where I get stuck. With book two, I didn’t write for a month. I couldn’t figure out why I wasn’t writing. Finally I realized it was because I had written a piece of every chapter, all the ideas where there, they just needed to be connected and finished. So, for me the hardest part is realizing when I’m ready to complete the novel.

What an interesting way to write. I bet it’s interesting putting the puzzle together at the end!

5. If you are in need of inspiration, where do you turn?

Great books. Whenever I’m reading a great book, I feel the need to write a great book. It stirs up the creative juices in me. Thank you Veronica Roth for Divergent and Moira Young for Blood Red Road. They’ve been my go-to over the past few months.

I haven’t read Blood Red Road and am adding that to my ever-growing TBR list 🙂

6. If you could pass on one important thing you have learned about the writing/publication process to other writers, what would it be?

Don’t get attached to scenes or chapters in your manuscript just because they are good writing, or just because you love them. If it doesn’t move the story along, cut it. You’ll be happy you did.

Great advice!

7. Do you have any new projects in the works?

Book two in the Children of the Gods series. I’m very excited about it. It’s nice to love my second book just as much as the first.

8. Do you have any writing habits that you absolutely have to adhere to for you to be able to write?

My brain decides where, when, and what to write. I really have no control over when the ideas come, but when they do, I make sure to get them out. Whether it’s on a restaurant napkin or the back of an envelope, if the words start flowing, I start writing.

That’s what smart phones are handy for! They’re always there to add notes into if you run out of napkin space 😉

9. What is your favorite book and movie?

My favorite movie will always be Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind. I’m pretty sure I have every word memorized. My favorite book changes as I read. Right now it’s a toss up between Divergent and Blood Red Road. Both are must-reads.

Great movie! That is definitely one of my favorites, too 🙂 Thanks for the great interview, Jessica!

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